Your writing critiqued
1. Suttree by Cormac McCarthy
And along the little ways in the rain and lightning came a troupe of squalid merrymakers1 bearing a caged wyvern on shoulderpoles and other alchemical game, chimeras and cacodemons skewered up on boarspears2 and a pharmacopeia of hellish condiments adorning a trestle and toted by trolls3 with an eldern gnome for guidon4 who shouted foul oaths from his mouthhole5 and a piper who piped a pipe of ploverbone6 and wore on his hip a glass flasket of some smoking fuel that yawed within viscid as quicksilver.7 A menosaur followed above on a string like a fourlegged garfish heliumfilled.8
2. V by Thomas Pynchon
While the sun was up, he and a crew of Syrian acrobats and a trio from Port Said (dulcimer, Nubian drum, reed pipe) performed in a cleared space by the Ismailiyeh Canal, out A fair. There were swings and a fearsome steam-driven carousel for the children; serpent-charmers, and hawkers of all refreshment: toasted seeds of abdelawi, limes, fried treacle, water flavoured with licorice or orange blossom, meat puddings.
